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Wiser Than The Aged by ~Broadcraig:iconBroadcraig:



I've embraced the pain
I've played the game,
I've fallen in love
I've given lovers the shove,
I've seen cities lit by firefly
I've seen the aged slowly die,
I've fallen in love by the age of twenty-three
I've seen the world; Looked upon things you could only dream
Things you'd not believe,
And still because you're older you feel you're wiser than me.
©2008-2009 ~Broadcraig
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Author's Comments

In terms of love, who is the wiser, those who continue to have relationships after being hurt....or those that stay away from relationships because they were hurt.

Is it wiser to be hopeful and take the chance of being hurt....or is it wiser to curl into a ball and protect yourself.

They say being wise comes with age, I disagree, youth means hope and open-mindedness....that's about as wise as I think it comes....innocence.

It terms of the poem, there's obvious rhyme's, this is pretty much the first draft as it's come out of my head bar abit of structure tweaking so I apologise if it's rubbish. The theme of love and the word loves crops up a few times as that is the main theme but with the idea of being wise obviously other themes are incorporated aswell.

Before I leave you to read the poem, I ask you this, at 18 we are often told that we are not wise in love, we are not old enough to understand love or get married....but we're allowed to go to war, hold a weapon and kill a man. So since when has there been an age limit on being wise enough to accomplish certain things?

Enjoy, it may be my last piece for awhile[hopefully]

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:iconblazing-blade:
yeah i really hate it when people say they know more than me just because they're older...its not necessarily true it depends on what u experience:nod:

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If it's good enough to take to your psychiatrist, it's good enough to make a song of.~Paul McCartney

Being voted the world's sexiest vegetarian is about as cool as it gets. It's not quite as cool as Brad Pitt, but it'll do.~Chris Martin
:icontokiohotel--lover:
wow. I can hear it as like a chorus to a really intense song.
it's really good
I get what you mean about others thinking they kno wmore.
my mom thinks she knows more about love than me, but she's divorced a few too many guys... eye-yi-yi...
back to the point
this is a very good poem

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That's what she said - alex
That IS what she said - Dr. Carpenter *points to someone in the class*
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You didn't give her a smoochy-bye-bye!! - sav
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I completely agree!

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:iconartistically-tragicx:
Very deep. I hate when people use age to determine how wise they are. Honestly, I know 14 year olds who are wiser than my parents. heh, really awesome job with this!

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:iconbroadcraig:
Yeah, i often feel that way when my dad is involved!

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You win, I'm sadder than you...

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Well at least she's still trying to achieve some form of perfect partnership with someone though!

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You win, I'm sadder than you...

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:iconameredreamer:
your words are very thought provoking .. and what else can one ask for ..

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:iconartistically-tragicx:
hahah I do too. the logic of my father is very odd...I usually don't trust a thing he says hah.

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Can I guess that I inspired this piece? It raises sincere questions.. and of course the answers are there too.. :blowkiss:

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