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Blood Thick Words Of Water by ~Broadcraig:iconBroadcraig:

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Engulfing the bathroom for the daily wash
Taps pulled like rope,
Blood red water spluttering like a lying daughter
It's enough to make you choke.

A battle against splatters
Fighting to keep the mess and the curtains from the rip,
Walls can be washed but words carve scars
How did I deserve this?

Who was there to catch the mess
To wash their poisonous words off the wall,
Who was there to bring me down to Earth
When I took your advice to let myself fall?

So blood isn't thicker than water
Water isn't any help unless you wish to drown,
The story ends with us all together;
Dying alone.
©2008-2009 ~Broadcraig
:iconbroadcraig:

Author's Comments

Blood is thicker than water. Water is thicker than blood. I disagree with both statements, we're all left to deal with the hardest problems alone. I don't want to stay alone like this.

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~FabioMigandChicas Jun 21, 2008, 8:19:55 AM
MORE POETRY!!!
:FORK:

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~prairiedaisy Jun 21, 2008, 8:29:02 AM
To take a line from KT Tunstall, everybody sails alone, but we can travel side by side. :hug:

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~whydoidothiseveryday Jun 21, 2008, 8:38:11 AM
very powerful, and i like the lying daughter hehe
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~DestinyxXxDancer Jun 21, 2008, 8:59:11 AM
this is brilliant, and whilst family aren't the best thing to deal with problems, u will find someone who will help you. I did. best of luck. :)
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~MissSnowflake Jun 21, 2008, 9:59:59 AM
Sometimes being alone is a choice. Not many people can fight for you, and even fewer would choose to.
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~Nat89 Jun 21, 2008, 10:18:12 AM
I'd live in your head with you if I could & you wanted me to. & I'll always do what I can to be there for you but try not to get it wrong & drive you away. Hope the feeling of being alone doesn't last.

It's an amazing poem by the way, really powerful, it builds up & concludes brilliantly. & I agree with the two comments above me by MissSnowFlake & prairiedaisy.

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~musical-fantasies Jun 21, 2008, 10:22:05 AM
Yup Everyone dies alone. Amazing poem.

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=peggymintun Jun 21, 2008, 10:37:22 AM
That is one of those realizations that one comes to along the way - that we are truly alone in that last experience. And alone a lot along the way.

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~atomicsushi13 Jun 21, 2008, 6:39:03 PM
so wonderful!
i love it
:D

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